Assignment #2 Yuki

Dear Ms. Rosa Jacson,

I am writing in regard to your request form.

Unfortunately, my computer is out of order because of system trouble, so I am not able to read you previous email. Also, I am not be able to open the attachments which you included to illustrate your problem.

Please accept my deepest apologies. I would be greateful if you could send me the email and attachment again.

Best regards,

Yuki Kakushima


EDITED VERSION BELOW
Dear Ms. Rosa Jackson,

I am writing in regard to your request form.

Unfortunately, my computer is out of work (out of order) because of system trouble, so I am not be able to read your prevoius email, and also I (TOO LONG: email. Also, I) am not be able to open the attachments inculuding some illustration of (which you included to illustrate) your problem.

Please accept my deepest apporogies (apologies). I would be greateful if you could send me the email and attachment again.

Best regards,

Yuki Kakushima

JONATHON'S NOTES: Good job! You had just a few minor problems with word selection, but your overall use of target language is good.