Business Correspondence Class 2

Wednesday, May 31, 2006

Assignment #1: Hugo

Dear Sally,

i'm writing with regard to technology convention in Las Vegas. i want to know about your plane.
i'm not sure when you will be getting back to the office.
Also i would like to give you the information to check in your laptop before the conference.
Plase find attached a sales report for the last business quarter, a spreadsheet of clients you should try to meet, a forecast of future sales and the new specifications for minimal requirements for use of our software.

Thank you so much and good luck.Sincerely,
Hugo

EDITED VERSION BELOW
Dear Sally,

i'm (I'm - ALWAYS USE THE CAPITAL I instead of the lower case i when using the pronoun) writing with regard to (your itinerary for the) technology convention in Las Vegas. i want (would like) to know about your plane (plans, as) i'm not sure when you will be getting back to the office.

Also i would like to give you the information to check in (on) your laptop before the conference. Plase (Please) find attached a sales report for the last business quarter, a spreadsheet of clients you should try to meet, a forecast of future sales and the new specifications for minimal requirements for use of our software.

Thank you so much and good luck.

Sincerely,

Hugo

JONATHON'S NOTES: Hugo, you've written a fairly clear message and used all of the target language. Hopefully, you will have enough time to write your next assignment by yourself. Good luck on your next assignment.

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